hi my name is Amer
My task was to create a native story.
I planed my story on a planing sheet, we had to fill in little boxes that said, setting, charters, mood, events and climax, and solution.
I chose an adventure one because I like to adventure.
I chose Ginger as a name because my teddys name is ginger.
Ginger in the Jungle
Ginger is a girl aged 10 years old with long brown curly hair falling down her face and hazel green eyes, lives on 10 Bucklick avenue in Wigram skies. Ginger was shivering in her room. It was 11:00pm on a cold sunday night. She suddenly had the idea to steal her parents car and drive off to the jungle. There was a gloomy jungle nearby and she had always wanted to explore it.
But then Ginger thought if she should because she would have to be back by morning, if she did not want her parents to find out.
Ginger decided to do it. So she creeped out of her room and snuck into her mum and dad's room and stole the keys to their cyan blue Toyota, that was on her mums cristal gold bedside table.
Just before Ginger could get out her dad started snorting.
Ginger got a huge fright. So she ran as fast as a yellow checked cheater to the garage to open the cyan blue car door.
Ginger saw a Tomtom map thing on a box in the garage. She thought she would take it in case she got lost.
Ginger drove for half an hour. When Ginger arrived she parked the Toyota on the bumpy road and she went into the jungle. Half way through her journey she came across a feis looking talking lion. She felt
The lion said ¨if you want to get past you will have to pass a quiz.¨
The first question was, my name is ben. ¨what can I do¨?
Ginger said¨ talk¨
And you are correct. You may pass¨
Ginger felt freaked out that Ben the lion might eat her so she sprinted like a african cheetah back to the cyan blue car.
She drove as fast as a racing car in an olympic race back home and roared in to the garage and carefully put the keys back by her parents and dived back into her bed.
By Amber
i really like your work because you add a lot of detail
ReplyDeletemaby next time you shold make it stay on the page
that reminds me of when i write a story about my teddy
Thank you Liyah for commenting on my blog.
DeleteIs there anything I should work on?
from Amber
Hey Amber This is such a good story that you made it makes senses and you have full stops, commas, expression and speech marks. I like how you made this story because you read read your story and it makes sense. I like this story because you have made it a good story because it has your name and how old you are. I like how you made it hope you comment on my blog. Thank you.
ReplyDeletehi Jessica
Deletethank you for your comment.
I will deftly comment on your blog.
from Amber.